By Harry Peel, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:48:18 am
12/9/2013 09:55:06 pm
I really liked how you nearly used all of your senses well done.Harry its extremly good keep it up
12/9/2013 09:56:10 pm
I like it because it has really good descriptive writing well done Harry
12/9/2013 09:56:16 pm
Harry fantastic 100 word challange
12/9/2013 09:57:17 pm
I really like your adjectives they give you a picture of what it would be like if you were there.
12/9/2013 09:57:36 pm
I really like the way you have used your feelings
12/9/2013 09:58:20 pm
very good Harry
12/9/2013 09:59:15 pm
I realy like the way you have used your feelings.
12/9/2013 09:59:23 pm
Welldone harry i really think that is genorouis of you to think of the people who dont get presents.
12/9/2013 10:00:45 pm
I like your artistic skills keep it up :)
12/9/2013 10:02:09 pm
I reely liked your work:)
By Molly Peel, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:49:15 am
A Christmas poem
12/9/2013 09:51:16 pm
I really like your poem Molly my favourite line is get all tucked up in bed in addition to children wake up, ready to have fun!
12/9/2013 09:54:19 pm
I really liked how you nearly used all of your senses well done.
12/9/2013 09:55:20 pm
Well done Molly, some good rhyming words. It really gives me a picture in my mind.
12/9/2013 09:59:30 pm
I liked your peom were every thing rimes when I read it. I just enjoyed it. well done Molly.
By Emilia Curl, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:49:51 am
After dinner I get so excited, even though I know I still have quite a wait! I like everything so organised! The order is: bath, pyjamas, supper, TV and bed at 7.30ish. Only thing is I can’t sleep!
12/9/2013 09:39:43 pm
I like how you describe what you hear and see well done
12/9/2013 10:01:34 pm
This year, I'm going to get myself organised just as you suggest. I hope I hear the sound of jingling bells so I know that Santa has visited my house.
By Callum Blackburn, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:50:35 am
I love Christmas
12/5/2013 06:09:41 am
What a super piece of writing - really helps me to see, hear and smell your idea of Christmas and remember what is special about the time of year.
12/9/2013 09:57:29 pm
Callum I really liked the adjectives that you have used and you have used good punctuation. Next time you could use some different openers. This a brilliant piece of work .
By Ryan Teggert, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:51:11 am
12/5/2013 06:23:59 am
You obviously have a lovely day to look forward to it's good to know that you appreciate that Ryan!
12/9/2013 10:00:26 pm
I realy like your story.My best part is when you talked about the presents it was realy good but you could of had more adjectives.
By Olivia Storey, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:51:56 am
The mysterious man in red!
12/6/2013 02:36:02 am
Thankyou miss chapman for uploading my work. My mam thought it was brilliant!
By Jonathon Bowes, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:52:44 am
A Christmas Day acrostic poem
12/5/2013 06:27:23 am
You make it sound such fun Jonathan!
By Jamie Eddy, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:53:23 am
That time of year again
Ryan Turnbull (6DC)
12/9/2013 09:40:00 pm
I really liked it were you describe what you do at christmas.
12/9/2013 09:57:49 pm
I realy like your description and adjectives but next time can you use better connectives, but overall realy good.
Abbie brandon primary
12/5/2013 03:01:03 pm
Well done Ryan t and Molly p I really like yours!!!
By Niamh Thexton, Year 6, Brandon Primary School.
12/5/2013 04:48:00 pm
12/9/2013 09:57:36 pm
i like the first part becuse it makes me like christmas day eating dinner next time you should add can you add a bit more comers
By Beth Heron, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 07:56:19 pm
I love Christmas!
12/9/2013 09:54:02 pm
I love it! I wouldn't change a thing about it, you have real talent Beth!
12/9/2013 10:04:09 pm
I liked it because she has done really good adjectives xx
By Paige Storer, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 07:56:49 pm
12/9/2013 09:53:26 pm
I really liked it were you described the setting.
12/9/2013 09:58:02 pm
"I like this!"
12/9/2013 09:58:58 pm
good use of speach Jonathon.
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