By Harry Peel, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:48:18 am
Christmas
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reece
12/9/2013 09:55:06 pm
I really liked how you nearly used all of your senses well done.Harry its extremly good keep it up
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Kieron Naylor
12/9/2013 09:56:10 pm
I like it because it has really good descriptive writing well done Harry
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Jack Tomlinson
12/9/2013 09:56:16 pm
Harry fantastic 100 word challange
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oliver 6DC
12/9/2013 09:57:17 pm
I really like your adjectives they give you a picture of what it would be like if you were there.
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alise aldersone
12/9/2013 09:57:36 pm
I really like the way you have used your feelings
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David Pearce
12/9/2013 09:58:20 pm
very good Harry
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alise aldersone
12/9/2013 09:59:15 pm
I realy like the way you have used your feelings.
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cameron
12/9/2013 09:59:23 pm
Welldone harry i really think that is genorouis of you to think of the people who dont get presents.
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michael
12/9/2013 10:00:45 pm
I like your artistic skills keep it up :)
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ryan
12/9/2013 10:02:09 pm
I reely liked your work:)
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By Molly Peel, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:49:15 am
A Christmas poem
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Emilia
12/9/2013 09:51:16 pm
I really like your poem Molly my favourite line is get all tucked up in bed in addition to children wake up, ready to have fun!
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reeces
12/9/2013 09:54:19 pm
I really liked how you nearly used all of your senses well done.
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Harry (6DC)
12/9/2013 09:55:20 pm
Well done Molly, some good rhyming words. It really gives me a picture in my mind.
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Niamh
12/9/2013 09:59:30 pm
I liked your peom were every thing rimes when I read it. I just enjoyed it. well done Molly.
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By Emilia Curl, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:49:51 am
After dinner I get so excited, even though I know I still have quite a wait! I like everything so organised! The order is: bath, pyjamas, supper, TV and bed at 7.30ish. Only thing is I can’t sleep!
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Niamh
12/9/2013 09:39:43 pm
I like how you describe what you hear and see well done
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Miss Scott
12/9/2013 10:01:34 pm
This year, I'm going to get myself organised just as you suggest. I hope I hear the sound of jingling bells so I know that Santa has visited my house.
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By Callum Blackburn, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:50:35 am
I love Christmas
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Mrs Hodgson
12/5/2013 06:09:41 am
What a super piece of writing - really helps me to see, hear and smell your idea of Christmas and remember what is special about the time of year.
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Jamie
12/9/2013 09:57:29 pm
Callum I really liked the adjectives that you have used and you have used good punctuation. Next time you could use some different openers. This a brilliant piece of work .
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By Ryan Teggert, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:51:11 am
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Mrs Hodgson
12/5/2013 06:23:59 am
You obviously have a lovely day to look forward to it's good to know that you appreciate that Ryan!
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Alex s
12/9/2013 10:00:26 pm
I realy like your story.My best part is when you talked about the presents it was realy good but you could of had more adjectives.
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By Olivia Storey, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:51:56 am
The mysterious man in red!
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olivia storey
12/6/2013 02:36:02 am
Thankyou miss chapman for uploading my work. My mam thought it was brilliant!
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By Jonathon Bowes, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:52:44 am
A Christmas Day acrostic poem
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Mrs Hodgson
12/5/2013 06:27:23 am
You make it sound such fun Jonathan!
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By Jamie Eddy, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 01:53:23 am
That time of year again
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Ryan Turnbull (6DC)
12/9/2013 09:40:00 pm
I really liked it were you describe what you do at christmas.
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Callum
12/9/2013 09:57:49 pm
I realy like your description and adjectives but next time can you use better connectives, but overall realy good.
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Abbie brandon primary
12/5/2013 03:01:03 pm
Well done Ryan t and Molly p I really like yours!!!
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By Niamh Thexton, Year 6, Brandon Primary School.
12/5/2013 04:48:00 pm
Christmas
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lewis
12/9/2013 09:57:36 pm
i like the first part becuse it makes me like christmas day eating dinner next time you should add can you add a bit more comers
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By Beth Heron, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 07:56:19 pm
I love Christmas!
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holly 6dc
12/9/2013 09:54:02 pm
I love it! I wouldn't change a thing about it, you have real talent Beth!
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Brandon Brennan
12/9/2013 10:04:09 pm
I liked it because she has done really good adjectives xx
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By Paige Storer, Year 6, Brandon Primary School
12/5/2013 07:56:49 pm
Christmas time
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Ryan Turnbull
12/9/2013 09:53:26 pm
I really liked it were you described the setting.
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Hasan Aktas
12/9/2013 09:58:02 pm
"I like this!"
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adam
12/9/2013 09:58:58 pm
good use of speach Jonathon.
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