Sol
9/10/2013 06:08:14 pm
I enjoyed the mystery of it all.
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Jamie
9/10/2013 06:09:24 pm
I liked the different adjectives you used, it helped me to build a mental picture.
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Grace
9/10/2013 06:11:03 pm
I liked the use of speech marks to show when people were talking, and the different description you used.
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Gina
9/25/2013 06:08:06 pm
I thought it was very interesting and I also got a mental picture in my head to.
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alicia
9/27/2013 02:59:48 am
Really good! Try not to use suddenly too much.
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Abbie
10/9/2013 04:42:10 am
Mystery of it all was really interesting I think.
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