I enjoyed the mystery of it all.
Can you think of a different sentence opener to use rather than suddenly.
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Jamie
9/10/2013 06:09:24 pm
I liked the different adjectives you used, it helped me to build a mental picture.
Can you use a range of different sentence openers.
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Grace
9/10/2013 06:11:03 pm
I liked the use of speech marks to show when people were talking, and the different description you used.
Can you use some of the WOW words from the bottom of the ambitious words prymid.
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Gina
9/25/2013 06:08:06 pm
I thought it was very interesting and I also got a mental picture in my head to.
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alicia
9/27/2013 02:59:48 am
Really good! Try not to use suddenly too much.
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Abbie
10/9/2013 04:42:10 am
Mystery of it all was really interesting I think.
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