I enjoyed the mystery of it all.
Can you think of a different sentence opener to use rather than suddenly.
I liked the different adjectives you used, it helped me to build a mental picture.
Can you use a range of different sentence openers.
I liked the use of speech marks to show when people were talking, and the different description you used.
Can you use some of the WOW words from the bottom of the ambitious words prymid.
I thought it was very interesting and I also got a mental picture in my head to.
Really good! Try not to use suddenly too much.
Mystery of it all was really interesting I think.
We are Year 6 at Brandon Primary School in County Durham. We are using this blog to extend our creative writing skills, and to demonstrate to a wider audience how fabulous we are!