A good 100wc blog. It was a good idea to describe the bats' eyes to help set the scene. Next time you could read your work out loud before publishing to check that it has the effect on the reader that you want it to.
I liked the way you built up the tension of the story.
Could you add some extra detail to describe the bats?
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