I enjoyed the story it had a good sense of pace.
Could you have started some of your sentneces with a different opener to I?
It was exciting.
Could you have included some speech?
I enjoyed reading the story.
Could you use a different opener to Dracula?
I enjoyed reading the story.You could uses a different openers.
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